Please help me! I need help

I need help revising my illustration paragraph. My teacher assigned me a 150 point assignment! That requires me to revise my paragraph about a girl I was partnered up with. I’m really bad at sentence structure so please if u can, help me make a lot of good revision that will make this a A.

Please help me I need help I need help revising my illustration paragraph My teacher assigned me a 150 point assignment That requires me to revise my paragraph class=