Rewrite the following paragraph to improve its unity and coherence. As you do this, consider the following:

Does the paragraph have a clear topic sentence?
Do all of the details logically support the topic sentence?
Does the paragraph have adequate transitions to make connections between sentences clear?
Is another sentence needed here or there to explain or develop a vague idea? Do not hesitate to add to the paragraph, if necessary!
Are any of the details irrelevant to the main idea of the paragraph?
Are any ideas repeated unnecessarily?

My eight-year-old brother is a pest. He is eight years old. He has black hair. He is not the average size for an eight year old. He is short for his age. He gets up early on Saturday mornings and wakes everyone up because the cartoons are on. On weekdays, we have to make him get up to get ready for school. He always waits until the last minute to put on his clothes. When he doesn't get his way, he whines until he gets it. He is a spoiled little brat. He always gets his way with our parents. This is the little boy that I have to put up with everyday.

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Answer:

My eight-year-old brother is a pest. He has black hair, he' short for his age. He gets up early on Saturday mornings and wakes everyone up because the cartoons are on, on weekdays, we have to make him get up to get ready for school, he waits until the last minute to put his clothes on. When he doesn't get his way, he whines until he gets it. He's a spoiled brat, he always gets his way with our parents. This is the boy I have to put up with everyday.

Explanation:

You don't have to mention his age or his height more then once, and there are  periods and commas where they're not supposed to be. and shorten the sentences the best you can because you won't keep someone hooked to what you've written, keep it short.