I can't really ADD anything, but I will GLADLY help fix errors and proofread. :D
Madelyn, [Insert who Madelyn is/was to narrator],
was one the few individuals who changed my life tremendously. She
lightened up my day and she was the main reason I even bothered coming to school. Thanks to her, I never skipped. If I did
something wrong and I told all my friends, Madelyn would be one of the
few who wouldn't tell me I made the 'best choice'. She would criticize me
and tell me what I did wrong. You might think it’s a wrong thing to do ,
but that isn't true since I changed the way I did things after what I heard her say. I learned a very important life
lesson a short time later.
WAIT A SECOND PLEASE!! Be sure you add information and details about this important lesson. Exactly HOW did you learn it? Coming from someone who doesn't know you, I have NO IDEA what you're talking about. ^^;
I learned not to judge a book
by its cover, but to get to know the person. When I leave Mazel Day
School I will remember all the lessons I took from these experiences and this friendship and
apply it to my adult life.
Other than what I told you about, it looks good!! :D
